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Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweigh the advantages.

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In recent times, most food vendors and consumable manufacturers are known to be in the practice of using food additives and preservatives in the production of goods
as a result
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 of tasty outcome and longer shelf life derived.
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, the demerits associated with the use of these condiments outweigh the merits, both views would be
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 expatiated on.
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 with, the mixture of preservatives and colourings with diet predispose individuals to a bad health outcome as these contain no nutritional value, are rather toxic and could result in ailments
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 as cancer and hypertension.
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, my aunt routinely adds colour and excessive spice to her rice when cooking. She was advised against
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 action but did not heed correction.
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, she came down with colon cancer at the age of 50.
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, diet spends a longer period on shelves, as
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, contain basically calories with no nutritional value predisposing people to obesity.
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, a few people in the food industry find it lucrative to add these chemicals to their products as the taste, colour and outcome of their edibles are improved,
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 they make huge sales and great financial returns.
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, my uncle who runs a drink company adds colour and flavour to his drink,
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 improves the taste and appearance, as ,
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 he makes plenty of sales.
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, whatever edible is produced has a longer duration when preservatives are added. In conclusion, despite the benefits of combining chemical substances with consumables to improve texture and duration ,the risk far outweighs the benefit as a healthy state is far important than wealth.a
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