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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree? Topics Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Individuals think that non-paid charity activities must be indulged in
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 of
higher level
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 students. I do agree with
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 statement as it will bring prosperity
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society and
also
 increase
moral
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 values of
people
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 works
brings
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 prosperity
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 by providing better living opportunities. Making students mannered physically and morally. The learners will know how to share someone's grief and how to help the needy. In 2013 a survey was conducted that describes the
people
 who are indulged in
these kind
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 of charity works have more opportunities to a better life.
Secondly
, when
people
 use to donate their time for poor it
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 more than of monetary terms,
Moreover
 they will
intract
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interact
 with the
people
 who are not matching them, they will have a feeling of kindness and belongingness.
Additionally
, the standard of living of
people
 could be raised. An article was published in the Hindustan Times shows that
people
 get better opportunities
of
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 life when they do some kind
works
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. In order to conclude it must be said that
society
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 workers
leads
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society to the path of success and happiness.
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 it
also
 helps to enhance the individuals personally.
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