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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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 number of
people
consider
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 that tourists should respect other countries culture and rules, whereas other
people
are not agree
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do not agree
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 with that statement and think that these aspects are not important,
however
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 host country has to be friendly to
variuos
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various
 cultural dissimilarities. In my view,
this
 is very useful for countries
be
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 aware
about
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 other different
traditions
. On the
one
 hand, it is true that
people
 begin to save their national
traditions
 regarding
diffrent
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different
 events. There is
a
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not a secret that
people
 from some parts of Earth have
a very old views
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a very old view
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to
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 actual life.
Actually
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 there is
a
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no doubt that
these kind
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 of
people
 have a conflict with their children.
For example
, when
people
 totally disagree with some other
traditions
 and refuse to change them, they suffer from
lack
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 of communication.
However
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 it can make
a
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enourmous
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enormous
 problem in societies,
such
 as conflicts
beetween
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between
 generations.
On the other hand
, there is no denying that
people
 feel cultural shock regarding some different
traditions
 in various countries. So something which is absolutely normal for
one
 person from
one
 part of
world
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the world
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 is horrible for another
one
.
For example
,
traditions
 regarding wedding party in Europe and Asia. Respecting and changing some cultural rules can be helpful for all societies,
actually
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 it can help to improve some of them.
Therefore
 it extremely important to make all conditions for tourists because as everybody knows it helps to improve economics in that country. To sum up, it is very important to exchange cultural
traditions
, so it helps to improve societies and being loyal to other
people
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural understanding
  • cultural harmony
  • local customs and behaviours
  • host country's traditions
  • unintentional offense
  • enhance the travel experience
  • cultural fabric
  • inclusive society
  • diverse society
  • global understanding
  • mutual respect
  • respect for local customs
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