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Atomic energy is becoming more and more popular energy source. However, some people argue that nuclear power puts life on the Earth to danger. What is your opinion?

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It is true that the amount of construction of nuclear
power
 is increasing so fast. It is commonly asserted that nuclear
power
 is a danger to our planet.
i
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 personally believe that there is no strong evidence to justify
this
 view.
First
 and most obviously, if government build atomic
energy
 station, the radiation
environment
 may suffer.
That is
 to say, the atomic
energy
 station’s surrounding area considered a dead zone, it is prohibited to live as far as possible.
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,
the
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 atomic
energy
 station’s surrounding area there is no plants, animals, population and live.
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, it may negative far-reaching consequences for the
environment
,
Also
 it becomes difficult to conserve valuable resources.
Additionally
,
although
 nuclear
power
 can produce a huge amount of
energy
, it is more likely that it damages the earth’s atmosphere. In, fact if the government do not build atomic
energy
stations
, which underlying cause of the destruction of green earth, there would be
such
 issues with climate and natural habitats. It is more likely that people destroying their own planet.
Finally
, even if atomic
energy
 has bad limited impacts
for
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 the
environment
, countries day by day aspire to open nuclear
power
stations
. unfortunately, in
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big countries which have a lot of these
stations
, they decreasing large areas which are suitable for
live
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. To conclude, whilst increasing atom
energy
 factories,
that is
 important that decrease the number of atomic
energy
stations
, which harmful to the
environment
. I would argue that whilst the number of atomic
energy
stations
 not increased yet so governments and scientists still should change their plans to preserve our valuable plane
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nuclear fission
  • Radioactive
  • Renewable energy
  • Decommissioning
  • Greenhouse gases
  • Emissions
  • Waste management
  • Energy security
  • Sustainable
  • Meltdown
  • Containment
  • Half-life
  • Nuclear proliferation
  • Clean energy
  • Risk assessment
  • Safety protocols
  • Energy crisis
  • Ecological footprint
  • Natural disaster
  • Energy transition
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