Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should therefore be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students. discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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time
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technologies
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computers
began the basis of the modern world.
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type of development has
also
their
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own pros and cons. On
one
side at the
time
of sharply developing infostructure
its
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needed to be evolved and keep up with the
time
. Using
computers
demanded at work, study and
also
teaching purposes. Every work or study purposes
are now depend
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on
computers
,making conferences, sending homework and
also
listening to the lectures are now done by only
one
digital- computer. It's comfortable to do a few
operation
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operations
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or
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of
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subjects
on
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one
time
and
consequently
maintain most of your
time
.
One
of the most important
advantage
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is spare your
time
, as I said before, using
computers
save most of your
time
, since no need to move from
one
to
other
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side of
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for
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example, to pass your homework or something else. On the other
side
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people get dependent on digital gadgets which contributes
some
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health
promlems
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problems
. and
also
using
computers
and work or study with
it
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all the
time
make our new generation
addictet
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addicted
addict
on
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it. In my humble opinion, they get more bashful, modest and have low self-confidence. Because, having
a real classrooms
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a real classroom
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, discuss with teachers or fellows provides
a
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confidence and make people exposed.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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