In many developing countries, there are major problems with the quality of air and water caused by both industry and construction. What are some of these problems? And what solutions could be provided to prevent this?

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Water
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and
Air
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are all
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important parts of our life, we can’t live without
water
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and
air
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. As though resources are polluted by various types of manufacturing and construction, it has a strong negatives
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on
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life.
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essay will discuss some of
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the major
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issues and how to make
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them
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become better.
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with, in terms of
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pollution
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, the main
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causes
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that causes
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the effluence is that the industrials waste was dumped into
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water
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the water
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. Because the contaminated
water
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can include lots of chemical substances and bacteria which can directly ruin our living environment and cause health
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such
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as: cancer, respiratory diseases, etc.
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, Ha
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is one of the most
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city
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of
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Viet Nam where you can see so many buildings with lots of
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near urban. And To Lich River is
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great example of
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pollution
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. The river is surrounded by To Lich
people
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’s houses and right
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to the industrial zone. Life of
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in that
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are
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hard and
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because of the bad smells and the black
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.
Health
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of
people
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in that
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usually in danger and always need support from
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the government
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more than
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in other
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places. To solve
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this
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problems government should seek to refresh the
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and
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the technology to take out the mud and industry’s oil under the
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place
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due to the fact that there so
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contaminates, and chemicals substances were oozed from near
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, and
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, they need to replace the
manufacture
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zone immediately because
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can be the most useful solution for keeping the
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resources clean.
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, about the
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pollution
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, the significant
problem
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is the large amount
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and fume are produced by
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and transportations.
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is
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a popular
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problem
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which
cause
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lots of
pollution
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but when it’s come to the vehicles, they
use
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the petrol to run so because of that there too much dust around us, even if I go out for a while
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I come back home, I can see my T-shirt
was totally change
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the
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. Let’s take Ha
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for example
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again, with a lot of high buildings and Industries, Ha
Noi
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can have both
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of
pollution
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water
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can
air
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. But
air
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pollution
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is the greatest damage to
people
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’s living
in
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here.
Last
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year, we were announced that the
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density in Ha
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was now up to
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dangerous level. That’s mean we can easily to respiratory diseases when
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we breath
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breath
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in the
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. We can tackle
this
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problem
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by using
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electronic transportations
instead
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of petrol ones because it is not going to make dust and create a positive effect
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our atmosphere.
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, the
factories
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which still need to
use
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coal to produce one more time need to replace, but with the manufacture can
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use
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the electronic, manufacture using technology is not only
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our living environment but
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boost the working productivity. In conclusion,
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and
water
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pollution
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are now at
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rate and it
cause
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causes
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so many diseases and destroys the environment. It makes
people
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feel sick and tired of it. But nowadays, we have already found out solutions for those issues. And in my essay, I have chosen to
use
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electronic
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instead
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of petrol or gas.
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, in
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use
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technology is an effective way to overcome
these
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this
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pollutions. What about you? How do you think?
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