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Some people think that studying history is a waste of time while other think it is essential to learn history. Discuiss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #history #waste #time #discuiss
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In today's world, learning historic lessons and teaching
it
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 to our children is one of the main purposes of many countries' educational systems.
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 some people argued that educating
history
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 can be considered as a wasting time, I believe that it can bring a wide range of benefits for the new
generation
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 and we must protect it as best as we can. On the one hand, there are some subjects which might be more important than others and schools have to pay more attention to them. Nowadays, due to the advent of
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 many subjects must be added to the student's curriculum and it is obvious that some other which are not necessary should be removed
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 as
history
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. As result,
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more investment in important subjects can provide more
benefit
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benefits
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 for our children.
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, the young
generation
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 must be aware of their past and it is our duty to transform
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 unrepeatable information to the
next
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generation
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. According to the
history
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 of the
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 there had a vast array of dark and negative stories which can repeat again and the only way to avoiding some of them is learning
history
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 and teach it to our children well.
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, not only they can have a practical approach in order to record their
history
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 as well as they can, but
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 youngers can gain their experience with learning it and forward their results to the
next
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generation
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. It is obvious that whenever we have enough experience of
history
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, we will have a better future. In conclusion, many people think that spending time learning about our past can be waste of time while I agree that it can keep our planet in a safe zone in terms of more educated people.
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