The government's investment in arts, music and theatre is a waste of money. Governments should invest these funds in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement
It is often argued issue whether the ministry's entertainment expenditure is a waste of capital or the cabinet should be allocated
these capital
in public services Change the determiner
this capital
such
as hospital
, education and so on. I strongly agree with Fix the agreement mistake
hospitals
this
statement for the following reasons.
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with, an
education is the primary Remove the article
apply
needs
for everyone and the government should invest more money Fix the agreement mistake
need
to
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in
this
kind of amenities rather than relaxing sectors. For example
, according to the survey said that more than 40% women
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of women
does
not educate to their primary level in underdeveloped nations due to free education Change the verb form
do
has
not provided equally. Change the verb form
have
Moreover
, an
entertainment activities are not important than basic needs Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
hence
, the ruling party should be funded a buge
amount of money on public facilities.
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huge
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, a
quality of medical amenities can lead to Remove the article
apply
healthy
society Correct article usage
a healthy
irrubutably
. People would like to liveCorrect your spelling
irrefutably
a
healthy community Change preposition
in a
instead
of relaxing factors. For example
, many countries do not provide a
better and Correct article usage
apply
modernate
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moderate
modern
medicial
treatment for their citizen Correct your spelling
medical
consequently
, many deadly diseases can spread such
as Correct article usage
the Corona
Corona virus
. To be more precise, Correct your spelling
Coronavirus
an
entertainment Correct article usage
apply
activities
of spending capital is Correct the article-noun agreement
activity
a
worthless when the public facilities not Change the article
apply
fullfill
.
To conclude, a person needs Correct your spelling
fulfil
for
relaxing tools but the ruling party Change preposition
apply
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does
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does
not
fund a huge amount of resources on these kinds of Change the verb form
does not
did not
buidings
. I strongly agree with Correct your spelling
buildings
this
statement because the ministry should be allocated a huge amount of monetary
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money
on
satisfy the people's basic needs and wants Change preposition
to
such
as school and hospital. I hope this
trend is conducive for builds a
advanced nation.Change the article
an
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