🔶Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugar products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. 🔸Do you agree or disagree?

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Many health issues have appeared by high levels of

sugar

used in

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food and drink production. Consumption of

sugar

should be declined by making it expensive. I agree with

this

idea because it can be beneficial to decrease using

this

ingredient and some diseases. In the following essay , the reasons for my agreement will be discussed. The main cause of making

sugar

expensive to reduce buying it would be the fact that when productions costs are high , it will be hard to purchase them .

Moreover

this

difficulty can be the cause of decreasing in

sugar

consumption.

Also

, reduction in

sugar

used encourages people to set other substances

such

as honey and brown

sugar

instead

sugar

which is healthier . As an example , drinking tea in

the

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breakfast with honey is healthier than

the

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sugar

and it is profitable to improve cardiovascular problems. It should be

therefore

said the

the

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public can not have a healthy living unless by taking less

sugar

in their meals that it would be possible by going up the

sugar

prices.

Additionally

, there is another reason to consider a high cost for

sugar

. There are many factories

which

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their food manufactures can not be produced unless by using

sugar

Furthermore

, manufacturers will not be able to purchase gross

sugar

because of its heavy expense .

Therefore

, The fewer factories can provide

sugar

, the fewer productions which contain

sugar

biscuit

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, chocolate will manufacture and

its

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a gain

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on people health. In conclusion , in my view , if

sugar

is made expensive , it will

has

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a positive influence on health. Because consumption of

sugar

can go down as

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result of being difficult to provide.

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🔶Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugar products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. 🔸Do you agree or disagree?

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