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Big salary is more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

#salary #job #satisfaction
In general ,
work
 gratification is
important
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an important
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 thing in our
live
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life
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 and not always
people
 can earn enough amount of money.While they
work
 for satisfaction others
work
 for money.
However
, I agree with humans who
work
 with satisfaction and do their
work
 well. Nowadays,
majority
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the majority
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 of
people
work
 for
big
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a big
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salary
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salaries
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 and lose their time and life for money.
Although
, we can
work
 for
ourself
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ourselves
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 and be happy.
For example
, if we compare
percentage
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the percentage
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 of the productivity job satisfaction and big salary we can see that
work
 gratification is twice higher.
Therefore
, they can make a career and have
a
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apply
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fun.
On the other
hand
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 we can understand them because they have their own problems their worldview and so on. What
i
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I
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 mean by
this
 that
people
 have their weirdness and
that is
 not the issue it is their life.
For instance
,
i
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I
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 have a neighbour and he
work
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works
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 as an engineer and always hate his job .
Consequently
, it is their choice and we can not decide it. In
conclution
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conclusion
,
i
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I
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Correct your spelling
believe
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belive
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believe
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 that
people
 start to love their job and do it well without negative
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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