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Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and methods of preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#convenience #foods #methods #preparation
by advancing
of
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technologies, fast and packed
food
 has
became
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 the most popular way to eat meals and it is very widespread for modern society. It means that
people
doesn't
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 want
cook
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for
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their meals. I completely disagree that
people
 want to find convenience
food
 more and more.
First
 of all, as times go by,
people
 start to aware importance of
food
. In fact, nowadays
people
 want to eat healthy
food
, even though they know most
of
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convenience
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food
 are not healthy
such
 as fast-
food
 and frozen-packed meals from
convience
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convenience
 stores. What's more,
people
 think that authentic
food
, which their
parent
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parents
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 cooked for them. It makes
people
 remind their memory.
Thus
 they can remember their family.
Secondly
, Authentic
food
 means
to represent
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 each
countries's
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 culture. The human being they always
has
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 been keeping their culture
thoughout
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throughout
the
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history. It means
people
 want to preserve their traditional
food
.
For example
, some
people
 still cook their meal even if it takes so long and
unconvenient
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inconvenient
.
Moreover
, some
people
 think that fast
food
 is not as delicious as traditional
food
.
That is
 because its tastes are very
aritifical
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artificial
critical
,
however
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 most of
traditional
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food
's tastes are very natural. To conclude,
although
 there will be a lot of fast foods and convenience
food
 are produced more and more,
people
knows
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 what is healthy and beneficial for them.
Also
, they want to keep their identity.
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