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Some people say that culture will be ruined if it is used as tourism revenue while other say it is good way to preserve culture discuss both views and relevant example?

Culture and tradition of every
countries
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country
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,refect the
heritage
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 of that region.Most
of
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apply
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the nation
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nation
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nations
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,rely on tourism sports for economic
purpose
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purposes
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.A group of people suggest that culture will
lost
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lose
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 their original identity and value
,
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apply
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if they are used for commercial
purpose
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purposes
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.Some opine that it is
conservative
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 way to save the
heritage
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.I concur with
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a later
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later
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latter
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 view. On the one hand,tradition will
be deteriorated
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deteriorate
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 if
nation
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the nation
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 used it for making money.Due to human impact
such
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 as
pysical
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physical
 touched ,click photographs and thrashing
garbagge
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garbage
garage
overthere
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over there
,which could gradually destroy the original splendid and meaning of that place.For instance ,
the
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apply
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 one of seven
wonder
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wonders
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,
Taj
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the Taj
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 Mahal , gradually gets fade by photons of camera light,
altough
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although
 photographs strongly prohibited over there.
As a result
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 ,
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heritage
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the heritage
a heritage
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 of the nation
,
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lost
their
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its
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 natural identity.
On the other hand
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,keeping
heritage
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 alive,
toursim
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tourism
 is
effective
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an effective
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 way .Most of
tourism
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the tourism
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 industry ,spend
huge
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a huge
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 amount on look afters of the products and maintains the original condition of the
heritage
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.
Customes
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Customer
Customers
 are needed to be conserves with
passage
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the passage
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 of time ,which could help in enhancing their life.
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Mother
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the Mother
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teresa
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Teresa
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 statue in India famous tourist attraction ,each year official authorities spend Million
rupees
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of rupees
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 on their
maintaince
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maintenance
. In conclusion,
although
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 tourist destinations
gets
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get
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 affected by tourism,but keeping
heritage
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 alive and maintaining its original identity
also
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duty
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the duty
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 of
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tourism
toursim
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the toursim
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 field.

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