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The job market today is very competitive and it is best to choose a career or field of study early in order to get a good job later in life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#job #market #career #field #study #life
The illustration describes various stages are involved in the production of a product. At a cursory glance, it is clear that the process has mainly two stages: manufacturing of the item and feedback on the process. In the beginning, research on the product is carried to make appropriate designs for the item, and planning of production is conducted. Here, a collection of key ingredients and components from the storage is taken place. Eventually, assembling, inspection, and testing of the goods happen. Following testing, the products are reviewed against the proposed design, and enter into the
next
 stage, which is the packaging.
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 stage is overseen by both product and market study teams, along with the commercialization section as well.
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 it is given feedback from the marketing study team as well as research teams of production.
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