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Due to increase use of aeroplane, air pollution is increasing more and more airports are constructed. Some people say that government should reduce air traffic by taxing it heavily. Do you agree or disagree?

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Airways are the modern form of transport for people to move from one place to another as it reduces time, money and energy.
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 argue that airways are causing more air pollution than ever before but I strongly disagree with
this
 statement and in
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Firstly
, aeroplanes are not the predominant cause of air pollution.
For example
, think of it
this
 way, if people were forced to use roadways for moving thousands of miles
then
 imagine the cost of fuel and time wasted towards that.
Also
, imposing a
tax
 would lead to the usage of airways only by elites which would not be a great idea.
Moreover
, increasing
tax
 would put significant stress on Indian tourism as individuals would prefer touring with other means of transport. Another reason why I disagree is that, if pollution is the problem, we need to resort to ways in which we could curb the environmental damage,
instead
 of imposing a
tax
 on airfare.
For example
, now the government is promoting and giving
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 for electric and batter cars to reduce carbon
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, investment should be made more into the research of finding an alternate fuel for aircraft and thereby reducing the toxic in air and save the environment as well.
Finally
, the modern style of transport is causing some environmental problems but the solution would be to find an alternative way to overcome the issue with advanced technology and solutions. Raising the
tax
 would eventually put a hole in common man's pocket and will put the country on the back foot rather than developing
further
.
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