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Housing and waste disposal are major issues of many countries to what extent do you agree and disagree

#waste #countries
Waste
management
 has
becoming
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 an alarming
issues
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of
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 many developing countries .The main cause of improper disposal
management
are
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 overpopulation and
industralisation
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industrialisation
industrialization
.It makes the duty of regimes and citizens to take effective steps to minimise the rubbish . The numerous reasons of throw the
garbaze
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garbage
 on
surrounding
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the surrounding
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 vacant
area
 without
second
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a second
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 thought ,what would be their effects on
environment
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the environment
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.
Firstly
,it
is happen
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 just because of insufficient space
of
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for
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 dumping in
populated
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a populated
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area
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areas
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.People migration from rural to urban
area
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areas
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make
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maks
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makes
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condition
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conditions
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more
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worse. Earth surface is covered by
bulidings
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buildings
 or apartments which cause the paucity of landfills.
For instance
 ,
in
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 metropolitan cities in India ,have inadequate land for dumps and improper measures of disposal
management
 and citizens throw the rubbish on residing
area
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,which causes
harmful
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a harmful
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impact
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impacts
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 on
land
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the land
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 as well on
environment
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the environment
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.
Second
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 cause
will
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that will
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 be important to
considered
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 is
industralisation
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industrialisation
industrialization
 ,most
of
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factories
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the factories
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 release
the
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apply
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non biodegradable
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 products into the soil which gets mixed in it .A survey conducted by National
Waste
Management
,
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revealed that 65%
factories
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of factories
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makes
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contribution
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a contribution
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in
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to
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Waste
 disposal .
Thirdly
,
due to
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 lack of inconsideration about cleanliness among the citizens ,
also
 provoke
this
 phenomenon .They don't think ,it makes the duty of them to
cleanisess
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cleanliness
cleanness
 of their own town. To combat
with
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these issues ,there are several measures ,
government
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the government
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 should
conducts
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 regular inspection in factories ,if any
industriest
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industries
 does not follow
protocol
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the protocol
a protocol
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 of
waste
 disposal
then
 they take should strong legislation on them.
Moreover
,regimes should
provides
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 free dustbins to
community
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the community
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 and bins are marked with specific
labell
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label
labels
labelling
 for solid and liquid
waste
 disposal .
In addition
 to
this
,official authorities should allocate
specfic
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specific
area
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 where rubbish could be dumped.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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