The population in most cities is growing as people move to cities to find work and new opportunities. What problem does overpopulation in the cities cause? How can these problems be solved?

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Many of the cities are getting overpopulated as individuals are shifting towards them in search of jobs and other options.
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, cities are facing many issues.
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, there are solutions available to these problems.the following paragraphs
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discuss the problems and the solutions. To start with , the vital problem that a city faces if it is overpopulated is the rise of skyscrapers to accommodate the public.
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, open areas
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covered totally with concrete.
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, deforestation
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building these tall buildings adds to the pollution problem
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already
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in those towns.
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building society with all amenities
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a huge amount of land and
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is acquired only by removing trees from the construction site.
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decreasing the green area of the metropolis.
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, an increase in the number of people not only increases the number of vehicles but
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raises traffic congestion. Positively, there are some practical solutions if implemented can undermine the above-mentioned drawbacks.
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, unrooted trees should be transported and placed on the outskirts to maintain greenery around the town.
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buildings should be avoided
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constructed in the middle of the main town area to have full ventilation over the city.
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, independent houses should be encouraged
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green plants in the garden in downtown areas.
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, fresh air can be breathed and pollution can be decreased.
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, people are seen floating towards cities for job opportunities and for other requirements and
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is creating some problems for that area .
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, taking certain measures can certainly combat those issues.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure to use transition signals more effectively, such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly', or 'Besides this', to improve the flow of your essay. Currently, some transitions feel slightly abrupt.
task achievement
Be careful with minor grammatical inaccuracies and sentence structure, which may muddy the message in some parts. Ensure subject-verb agreement and verb forms are consistently correct.
task achievement
Your essay provides a clear and comprehensive response to the task, addressing both the problems and solutions related to overpopulation in cities.
coherence cohesion
The introduction very effectively sets up the discussion, and the conclusion neatly summarizes your points.
task achievement
You have provided relevant and specific examples, such as the impacts of building skyscrapers, which help illustrate your points well.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • overpopulation
  • urbanization
  • strain on resources
  • property prices
  • traffic congestion
  • public services
  • healthcare
  • education
  • sanitation
  • unemployment rates
  • competition
  • green spaces
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • quality of life
  • mental health
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