Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities are become more isolated. Discuss both sides & give your opinion.
Last
decades we have shown an increasing growing
in communication applications which are mainly used over the internet. The usage of these applications, Replace the word
growth
such
as Facebook, Twitter, Snapchat, ...and etc, make
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makes
people
much closely
around the world, in ,contrastReplace the word
closer
make
other Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
people
separated . this
essay will discuss both sides and introduce my point of view. On the one hand, the existence of the internet in our lives
, make
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makes
people
easily exchange their news
around the world. For example
, if one has a special occasion, he can share
his party with his family and his friend even if they are
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Thus
, it is clear how the internet has made people
feel close together. on the other hand
, it is popularly
that Change the word
popular
people
tend to share
their news
, their special parties, and their interests with other people
who live away and who do not have any relation with them, but at the same ,time they tend to keep themselves away from their neighbours or their relatives
. In other words
, they isolate themselves locally, ,however
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share
their news
with anyone who are
outside their countries, cities, and towns. I expect that because they do not want to allow Change the verb form
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anyone
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any
relatives
to interfere in their lives
, since the others can not affect their lives
because they are already outside their home town. In my opinion, I totally agree with both point
of view , and Fix the agreement mistake
points
that is
because I have noticed that most people
tend to hide their private lives
from their relatives
or their friends to protect their privacy. so most of the time, they keep themselves away from their neighbourhood, relatives
and friends. They, for instance
, virtually share
their updates with their family who live far away, but they do not prefer to share
the same updates with their close family, neighbours, or friends in real life. so the people
who are
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part
away feel they are close when they exchange their updates , in ,contrast the close Correct your spelling
far
people
feel isolated from each other when they do not take part in relatives
' events in real life. to conclude
, sometimes, we can not understand why people
prefer sharing their news
with those who are living away from them, but they absolutely do not like sharing the same news
with other people
who are close to them, and they tend to isolate themselves in
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local
.Change the word
locally
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- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
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