The number of people who are at risk of serious health problems due to being overweight is increasing. What is the reason for the growth in overweight people in society? How can this problem be solved?

We are living in a world, where
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of overweight
people
is a serious threat to our society and we need to address
this
issue as soon as possible. There are plethora reasons that why it's
such
a big issue for all of us and
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am going explain it in the
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following
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paragraphs
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with possible
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solutions
to
this
problem.
To begin
with, majority of the
people
like to spend their day on the sofa, while playing games and eating chips and fish. which is obviously one
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main reason why maximum
people
that we see on a day-to-day basis are so
fat
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fast
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that they can't even move on their own. I hope we all remember the famous TV show my 600lb
life
, we saw their struggle, they want to lose their weight so badly, but they are not trying hard as they should. well, The only way to solve
this
problem, is that they have to either join the gym or take yoga classes, which are going to help them to
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loose
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weight and gain more confidence.
In addition
, the other main reason
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the problem is our sedentary lifestyle.
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number of folks want sitting jobs in their
life
and they make it their goal and they work so bad for it. After some time like five to six
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they start noticing that they are gaining weight. According to Healthy
life
Magazine
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48
people
out of 100 are fat and
this
number is increasing rapidly. As old
people
say, that you are never late in your
life
until your heart is beating. They can start by creating their own diet which includes green vegetables, fruits as well as some dry snacks like almonds, walnuts and
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sunflower
sunflowers
seeds. one more thing masses can do is by
quiting
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quitting
smoking and
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alcohol
which leads to belly fat and so many other diseases. In the
last
, I just want to say that nothing is hard
people
need to try hard and they can overcome anything.
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steps can change lives, just start with
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quitting spirit and they are going to see the difference sooner than later.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • sedentary
  • caloric intake
  • genetics
  • nutritional awareness
  • processed foods
  • fast food
  • lifestyle diseases
  • preventative measures
  • tax incentives
  • urban planning
  • community gardens
  • wellness initiatives
  • dietary guidelines
  • physical fitness
  • calorie-dense
  • portion control
  • metabolic rate
  • health literacy
  • food deserts
  • work-life balance
  • junk food
  • BMI (Body Mass Index)
  • non-communicable diseases
  • food labeling
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