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Some say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their spare time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is undeniable fact,
Children
 are the future of
nation
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. It is believed by some, pupils should be motivated by their
parents
 to participate in
team
activities
 in their free time , while others masses advocate, that it is pivotal for minors to learn how to engage themselves in groups
activities
by
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on
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 their own.
This
 essay will examine both the arguments and draws a logical conclusion in end. To commence with, there are
plethora
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 of reasons which say
parents
 should stimulate their
children
 to take part in groups competitions.
First
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 and foremost reason is that groups
activities
 teach how to develop mutual understanding with
team
 members .
Thus
parents
 believe that group
activities
 teach their
children
 how to make great rapport with everyone
that is
 why
parents
 encourage them for participating in
team
activities
.
Secondly
,
parents
 believe that group
activities
 give their
children
 chances to learn leadership
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not only
this
 , they
also
 believe that group
activities
 teach
the
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management skills.
For instance
, if a child is a captain of the school cricket
team
 as captain he would have to manage other players and other small things like; time management and discipline.
On the other hand
, some individuals reckon that
children
 should be enough mature to participate in
competition
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 on their own without having any discussion with their guardians.
Firstly
, it is a positive development if
children
 involved themselves to take part in
competition
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the competition
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 by doing they get to learn the value of competitiveness and they are being aware of different schooling
activities
. In conclusion,
although
 it is correct
at
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 some extent that
children
 should be aware
about
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 participating in different
activities
 in schools by themselves but , yet believe that they are vulnerable at that stage of their life so they could not understand the real motive behind competitions so their
parents
 should definitely stimulate their
children
 about organised
team
activities
.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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