THERE IS GROWING EVIDENCE THAT MAN-MADE ACTIVITIES ARE MAKING GLOBAL TEMPERATURES HIGHER. WHAT MIGHT BE THE MAN-MADE CAUSES OF TEMPERATURES RISING? HOW SHOULD WE DEAL WITH THIS PROBLEM? GIVE REASONS FOR YOUR ANSWER AND INCLUDE ANY RELEVANT EXAMPLES FROM YOUR OWN KNOWLEDGE OR EXPERIENCE

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due to human interference in the environment .Pollution and
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are two main
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of
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issues. The main reason
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ever increasing
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earth
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of private vehicles on road ,release
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harmful impact on
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gases in our atmosphere .
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ozone layer depletion start
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in earth
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pollution control board reveals that 67%of
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emissions from vehicles make
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global
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reasons
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that need to be considered is
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expansion and urbanisation , the rate of
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has been decreasing every year,which
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deterimental
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effects on natural climates.
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,According to Food and
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organisations ,38%
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expansion
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. There are several effective measures ,which will
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issues. It makes the duty of both government and citizens to bring down the climatic conditions normal.Citizens should give more priority to public transport and less to owned vehicles,which helps to lower carbon emissions
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camp
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about reforestation .It is
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effective way to prevent
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global warming .
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conclusion,due to human activities make
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conditions unfit for mankind.Excessive transportation on roads and
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purpose
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more
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among peoples about reforestation and government efforts could
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to bring down
gobal
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temperature
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

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