THERE IS GROWING EVIDENCE THAT MAN-MADE ACTIVITIES ARE MAKING GLOBAL TEMPERATURES HIGHER. WHAT MIGHT BE THE MAN-MADE CAUSES OF TEMPERATURES RISING? HOW SHOULD WE DEAL WITH THIS PROBLEM? GIVE REASONS FOR YOUR ANSWER AND INCLUDE ANY RELEVANT EXAMPLES FROM YOUR OWN KNOWLEDGE OR EXPERIENCE

World
temperature
has been becoming an alarming
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of
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many countries .
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is happens
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due to human interference in the environment .Pollution and
deforestation
are two main
cause
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of
temperature
rising and in
this
essay , will suggest several measures which will
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to mitigate
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issues. The main reason
of
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ever increasing
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earth
temperature
across
globe
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.
Firstly
,
rise
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of private vehicles on road ,release
harmfull
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harmful
pollutant
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in
air
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,which
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causes
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cause
harmful impact on
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gases in our atmosphere .
As a result
ozone layer depletion start
occuring
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occurring
,which enhances
rise
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the rise
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in earth
temperature
.
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,A survey conducted by
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pollution control board reveals that 67%of
carbion
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carbon
emissions from vehicles make
contribution
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in
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global
temperature
.
The another
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reasons
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that need to be considered is
deforestation
. Due to
agriculture
expansion and urbanisation , the rate of
forest
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the forest
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has been decreasing every year,which
cause
deterimental
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detrimental
effects on natural climates.
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,According to Food and
Agriculture
organisations ,38%
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expansion
cause
the
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global
deforestation
. There are several effective measures ,which will
helps
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to mitigate
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this
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issues. It makes the duty of both government and citizens to bring down the climatic conditions normal.Citizens should give more priority to public transport and less to owned vehicles,which helps to lower carbon emissions
level
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in
atmosphere
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.
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,
government
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the government
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should organise
awareness
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camp
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about reforestation .It is
most
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effective way to prevent
from
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global warming .
To
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conclusion,due to human activities make
environment
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conditions unfit for mankind.Excessive transportation on roads and
deforestation
for
agriculture
purpose
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make
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the condition
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condition
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conditions
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more
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worse.
Awarness
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Awareness
among peoples about reforestation and government efforts could
helps
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help
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to bring down
gobal
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global
temperature
normal.
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