Some countries today have passed laws against smoking tobacco in public buildings such as offices and restaurants. Other countries have no intention of doing this. Consider the possible arguments on both sides of this debate, and reach your own conclusion on which side you favor.

In many countries, smoking tobacco in public places is forbidden by the law while other countries have no purpose of doing it.

However

it is against human rights, it

also

affects others'

health

in a negative way and can be the cause of increasing serious diseases. We will discuss both sides of the topic. On the one hand, countries

where have allowed indoor smoking in bars and restaurants

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, where have allowed indoor smoking in bars and restaurants,

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made their decision on local places. It is important for governments to hear and state other’s opinions to make law. They cannot make their decision against human rights.

Thus

majorities' points of view play a major role in decisions to make for the public.

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example of

this

is Florida where smoking-free,

however

, bars and restaurants still allow smoking.

On the other hand

, states have banned smoking where they claim that smoking indoors can be harmful to the

health

for

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those who are surrounded

by

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. It is quite a serious issue of public

health

as well. It leads to

increased

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an increased

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risk of public heart disease, cancer and

damaging

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a damaging

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impact on

lungs

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the lungs

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. Especially the almost 100 million Americans who are suffering chronic conditions

such

as asthma and bronchitis because they smoke permanently everywhere and

everytime

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. In conclusion, banning smoking can help improve the

health

of the general population.

As a result

of the improvement, hospital overwork can be reduced in the

long-term

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.

Benefits

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of smoking in public places can make it easier for people who have the intention to quit and prevent

from

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apply

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future diseases.