Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for, and allow their children to do whatever they want. Is this a good way to raise children? What consequences could this style of parenting have for children as they get older?

Providing everything to children as per their request and allowing them to do whatever they want has risen enormously in the recent past. I always argued against
this
type of parenting as it leads to bad effects on a
child
's growth. In
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essay, I will explain various negative outcomes for the young ones. No doubt, fulfilling all the dreams of the children is the centre of attraction of most of the parents. But, it carries
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of bad consequences, as children will never understand the importance of hard work. They will get everything easily and never make efforts to procure it. Gifts and credits earned by hard work
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own charm.
Also
, it will make them selfish and self-centred, will never learn the significance of sharing and patience, become intolerant in long run.
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, a
child
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of toys will never take care of it, as he knows that he will get a new one if anyone
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torn.
Furthermore
, as the
child
grows and they become careless about their expenses, which disturbs the family budget, leading to poor handling of finances and depression. I think all young ones should be taught the importance of money-saving
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so that by the time they grow to adolescence, they are able to manage finances. For sake of conclusion, Peaceful parenting letting the
child
whatever they want does much of the harm with almost no benefit, making them more greedy and spoiled
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. I encourage the parents to have effective parenting to avoid
such
problems.
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