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Band 5.5

You recently bought an expensive electronic product from a store, and found that the product does not work properly. Write a letter to the store manager.

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I believe you are the customer services manager of City Electronics in Cambridge, and so I am writing to complain about a digital camera I bought from you on
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 March 2015.
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 I have followed all the directions in the manual, I find that the camera does not focus or zoom properly, meaning
that is
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 not fit for purpose. I have emailed and phoned your store several times to complain, but nobody has taken ownership of the problem so far. I
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 ask you to issue an immediate refund of the price (my receipt is attached)
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 the credit card that I paid with. I am
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 requesting that you send a courier to collect the camera from my home address, as I am reluctant to use
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regular mail to return it to you in case of
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 damage. Would you kindly reply in writing by return, confirming that these steps will be taken and that the refund and collection are planned to go ahead, with the anticipated dates
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 I have been a loyal customer for the past three years, and I am confident that you will take all steps to keep my custom.

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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