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In the future, people may have to live on other planets. Some think that it is therefore important to spend money researching other planets such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Advent
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 of modern science and technology have boosted
the
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space exploration. At some point, human life will reside on
other
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planet
 or moon.
Therefore
, it is essential to spend resources and money on the research of other planets. From my point of view, we can use
this
 money for the development of
existing
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the existing
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planet
.
To begin
 with, there is a lot of advancement in technology to find the possible living on the various
planet
such
 as mars and
jupiter
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.
A plenty
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 of money is used for space exploration and spacecraft. Despite
this
, we can spend that wealth on our own
planet
 on improving the environment and
the
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lifestyle.
Moreover
, we can focus on the research of making
earth
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 eco-friendly and
pollution free
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pollution-free
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. As we know that we have limited natural resources left and
its
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 really important to find an alternative
on
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 that. To take one example, ISRO has launched
a
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several space
rocket
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rockets
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 worth
of
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10 million dollars, which can be spent on making life better
on e
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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