Each year, the crime rate increases. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity?

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worldwide issue and
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the past decade, the percentage of
crime
is increased significantly.
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the reasons
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the
crime
and how to limit the increase of the
crime
rate
. The reasons behind the illegal activities are countless and in
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the essay will show some of them.
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reason is
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poverty
. Many
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support the idea that the relation between
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crime
and
poverty
is positive relation which means that when the
poverty
rate
increased the
crime
rate
is increased
also
. Another reason is peer pressure.
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pressure
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a huge impact on
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individual activity, so
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when ever
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the person have
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bad company he definitely going to change his activity to fit with them. The
last
reason is
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of drugs. The use of illegal drugs definitely leads to illegal activities ,
such
as stealing and killing.
On the other hand
, there are many solutions to limit the
crime
rate
.
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solution for the
crime
is that the
governments
should prevent
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poverty
by providing more education facilities and aid to the
people
who under the
poverty
line. The more
people
get education and support from the
governments
the
crime
rate
will
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. Another solution is that the
governments
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sever
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punishments on anyone that do a
crime
. The
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the punished is the low of
people
do the
crime
. To sum up, the
crime
and illegal activities
rate
rase a lot in the
last
years, the probable reasons for the
crime
are
poverty
, peer pressure effect, and use of drugs. While
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the likely
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to it
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the
governments
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aid for the plover
people
and the severe punishments from the
governments
.
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