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Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and methods of preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#convenience #foods #methods #preparation
In
the
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modern life ,
convenience
foods
 are becoming more and more popular.
People
 even consider that they will replace traditional
foods
 and methods of preparation. I absolutely disagree with
this
 view. The
first
 thing I should mention is that long-term consuming
convenience
foods
 adversely affect
the
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health.Takeaway
lead
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people
 to increase extra calories intake in the diet without proper nutritional balance. It
also
 brings a lot of diseases
such
 as obesity, diabetes,hypertension and so on.
Second
, individuals can lose their inquiring mind due to the available making of
convenience
foods
.
People
 have just chosen their
favorite
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foods
 without concerning how to make them.
Last
 but not least, it makes
less
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 opportunities for socializing. If you prefer eating with family or friends, it will be hard for preparing together because there are so many restaurants or cafes open 24 hours a day where has many
convenience
foods
. In summary,
convenience
foods
 can’t take place
traditional
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foods
 which are symbolic for
culture
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the culture
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 of
difference
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 nations.
Moreover
, cookery programs show that
people
 are really interested in traditional methods of preparation.
This
 essay refuted the claim of replacing traditional
foods
 with
convenience
foods
.
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