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Rich countries not only provide money in form of help to developing countries some believe other form of international aid also important,give your opinions and reasons of your answers with relevant examples

#countries #money #form #believe #aid #answers
It makes
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moral duty of
developed
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the developed
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nation
 to lend the
helps
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help
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 to
third
countries
 during the time of natural disaster or in crisis.A group of people believe that money is
instant
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 and convenient way to provides
the
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help to
undeveloped
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the undeveloped
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nation
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.While some claim that other
form
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 of foreign aid like services,job opportunities and
bulids
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builds
build
 schools or colleges are
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more effective
form
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 of
helps
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.I opine that
,
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the aid of wealthy
countries
 is
imperative
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 way to fight with
poverty
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the poverty
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 of developing
countries
. On the
first
 hand ,the supporter who told that financial support is
efficient
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an efficient
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 way of help.Most
of
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third
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countries
 living in
under
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debt and unable to provide good education and jobs to their citizens . By providing allowance and funds to people of
poorer
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a poorer
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nation
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 can use that money in their education and in other services which would
helps
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them to
getting
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 jobs.
Thus
 ,would decrease the unemployment rate and illiteracy rate in
nation
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the nation
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.
For instance
 ,a survey revealed that collaboration between
US
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 and Syria
country
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 could
leads
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 to 14%improvement in
education
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 sector.
As a result
,people would easily get jobs which would enhance the economy of
nation
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the nation
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.
On the other hand
,some who suggest that other
form
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 of aid
also
 need to be considered
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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