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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is widely
belived
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believed
believe
 that
language
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 is a huge problem for
people
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 who live or plan to move abroad,
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, it could be
reason
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the reason
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 why
people
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 prefer to stay in their country of origin. I hold the view that
,
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language
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barier
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barrier
 is a huge problem,
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however
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 it is possible to avoid
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 social
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, research
suggest
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 that
people
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 who move abroad have a fear of
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,
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 when they can not spell words correctly or might not
undrestand
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understand
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on
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 their questions. Due to these reasons, they just stop
to talk
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 with native speakers and commence to lose their social contacts, which can lead to
lonelyness
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loneliness
 and might be
problems
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 with
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established
extablished
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the extablished
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 law of
this
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 country.
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, if a person lived in a city where it was
neccesary
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necessary
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a
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garbage and
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 moved to the country where it is one of the important rules, but did not aware
about
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 that due to lack
knowledge
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of knowledge
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 of
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language
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the language
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, it could be
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a serious
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 issue for
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 person.
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,
people
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 abroad try to pass their time at home, and they do not haunt new contacts.
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 there is a reason why they have
a social
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social problems
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problems
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,
people
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 who lived in isolation, in the
furure
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future
 have a lot of
problems
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 in
converstion
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conversation
 with others.
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, the part of
brain
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the brain
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 which is responsible for speech begins to decline. To conclude, it is tough to speak in
international
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an international
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language
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,
thus
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 it can lead to mental and social
problems
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.
However
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it is possible to avoid these issues by
strong
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a strong
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 passion to learn
new
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a new
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language
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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