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In our technological world, the number of new inventions has been increasing. Please make an example with its impact on our lives, and explain if it is beneficial or not.

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Technological innovations are increasing day by day, creating an impact on our
life
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. These innovations can have a positive effect
as well as
 damage at times. I believe that most of the
inventions
 are for the betterment of humankind and
thus
 are beneficial. As technology has advanced, it paved the way for new
inventions
 making our
life
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lives
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 easier. Let us take an example of the agriculture industry where new creations and the latest
meachinary
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machinery
 have made farmers' lives easy—starting from preparing the crop, bowing seed,
watering
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and watering
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 plants till harvesting
crop
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the crop
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 is done through machinery. Not only it
made
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farmers
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farmers'
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life
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 relaxed but
also
 improved the production of the crop. Before
this
 technological advancement, all these activities were done manually by humans themselves or with the help of animals. Other examples of
inventions
 are the automobile and telecom industries etc.
On the other hand
, some
inventions
 have a negative impact and threats to humans. The race
of having
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 advanced and latest weapons between countries is one
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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examples
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example
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. These weapons and warheads are used against enemy countries, and
it
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they
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 directly
impacts
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impact
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 human
life
. Countries keep spending huge
amount
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amounts
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 on making and buying new warheads
instead
 of spending it on their nation's education and health to make their lives better. In
this
 world, everything has its own positive and negative sides depending on how we perceive it, use it, and apply it to our
life
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;
however
,
overall
 new
invention
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inventions
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 in the technological world
is
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are
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benifical
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beneficial
 for our lives. The negative aspects of these technological advancements can be managed by making
legislations
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legislation
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 on the national and international levels to address these concerns.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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