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some people believe that international sporting events are the ideal opportunity to show the world the qualities of the host nation. Others believe that thesze events are mainly large unjustifiable expense. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It has become a controversial issue that whether game
competitions
 at
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 level are
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 way to represent nationwide or they are just a means of wastage of money. Sports are a great medium to keep healthy and fit, so I believe that
such
competitions
 play a vital role to present a country among other nations.
First
 of all, organizing sports
competitions
 internationally speaks about the resources of hosting country to the world and help to develop harmony with other nations.
For example
, at the times of cricket match in India, Pakistan team visits
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India, which can be a
founndation
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foundation
 of
freindship
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friendship
 between two countries. Participating players from different nations get an opportunity to learn about other fellow players and their cultures, which would result
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 a
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 friendships.
Secondly
, when sports personalities visit other countries for
competitions
, they come to know about the culture and lifestyle of that hosting nation.
Furthermore
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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