To achieve personal happiness, the relationships we have with other people (friends, colleagues, family) are more essential than every other thing. Issues like wealth and occupations take the second place. Write to support this claim
In the recent world, the living style and thinking of
people
has
been changed as compared to Change the verb form
have
tradition
world. Replace the word
traditional
Furthermore
, people
become more career oriented
and busy in the race of increasing their wealth. But it is undeniable that the secret of real happiness is still associated with friends and family. Add a hyphen
career-oriented
This
will be proven by bringing up the example of superstars who live their life
in a
loneliness and in depression despite Remove the article
apply
of
having all luxuries in their Remove the preposition
apply
life
.
Foremost, to demonstrate that money can not buy happiness, the life
of wealthy people
can be taken as a
example Change the article
an
such
as it is commonly seen in news
that there are many actors, Add an article
the news
singer
and athletes who are taking anti-depression medicine and commenting suicide in spite of having bank balances, living in Villas and living a Fix the agreement mistake
singers
life
that only we can immagine
. Correct your spelling
imagine
This
proves that fame and luxury are not adequate for innner
peace and Correct your spelling
inner
self contentment
.
Add a hyphen
self-contentment
Secondly
, we can not create emotions and feeling
in Fix the agreement mistake
feelings
some one
heart by materialistic things. Correct your spelling
someone
Lets
take Replace the word
Let's
Let us
example
of Add an article
the example
an example
people
living in previous
decade who were living a simple and natural Add an article
a previous
life
and they had true affection towards their relations as they spent most of their time with their family and friends and share their problems. But, now a days
, becoming Correct the word
nowadays
career oriented
and busy in improving their standard of living makes Add a hyphen
career-oriented
every one
Replace the word
everyone
life
busy and less time for relations. Which makes people
depressed, lonely and frustrated because of having no one in their tough time and share their problems.
By considering all the aforementioned reasons, the
Correct article usage
apply
self satisfaction
and happiness Add a hyphen
self-satisfaction
can not be brought neither
by living a Rewrite the sentence
can be brought neither
luxury
Replace the word
luxurious
life
nor by profession. Every living human beign
needs association with relation to Correct your spelling
being
live
a healthy and peaceful Change the verb form
living
life
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