Children can learn effectively by watching television. Therefore they should be encouraged to watch television both at home and at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

One of the main components of
children
's upbringing is modern and updated education. Parents try their best to provide all the possible opportunities
to
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their
children
to learn. All the
students
in one grade level are not necessarily on the same level of intelligence and
hence
lack in some subjects whereas excel in others.
This
usually depends on the family, cultural and economic background they are coming from.
Similarly
, the learning tendencies of all
students
vary from one child to another and
hence
learning and teaching methodologies' effectiveness vary from teacher to teacher and student to student. Some
children
learn fast through digital
medium
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whereas some
students
are more efficient with real books and teachers physically present. Digital medium and virtual technology have become very popular since 2019
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when the pandemic hit the world. The entire education system has changed and moved to virtual learning. Many
students
who were already
tech savvy
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enjoyed
this
virtual learning but the young
children
between the ages 2 to 5 are now being
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to extra screen
time
named as online learning or some get away from daily routine, which is mentally and physically affecting the health of the
children
. Under
such
circumstances,
children
have become lazy and are now less creative and imaginative with their daily activities.
This
has
also
led to less explorative behaviour which limits their thinking capacity and hinders the hands-on learning experience. Television contributes to learning to some extent but when the exposure exceeds the allowed limits the desired results are not achieved and in some cases the results are terrible.
Children
become
addictive
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to screen
time
and become less social and less interactive with family and friends. I have myself experienced
children
imitating the cartoons and copying their accents at
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early age since they spend
majority
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the majority
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of their
time
in front of
screen
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and less with the family members.
Therefore
, my opinion regarding
this
statement is towards a disagreement that
children
should be encouraged to watch television both at home and at school. Television should only be limited to homes where kids should be permitted
certain
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time
to engage in watching some educational movies and documentaries. In schools,
children
should be encouraged more to engage in multiple activities which enhance their motor and sensory skills.
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  • passive
  • sedentary
  • limit
  • creativity
  • imagination
  • educational content
  • expose
  • different cultures
  • perspectives
  • negative effects
  • behavior
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