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criminality is groing among children and teenagers. Why is it growing and how should these criminals be treated?

#criminality #children #teenagers #criminals
In
this
 fastest growing era, masses are an enormous busy to earning money,
thus
, juvenile
do
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 not get family support all the
time
However
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, nowadays criminal rates along with teenagers enhanced due to some elements. In
this
 essay, I will explain why
this
 increase rapidly and how should
parents
 and teachers treat
to
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this
 criminal offence. These days
parents
 have no
time
 for their
children
 due to
hectic
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 schedule of their work;
hence
, sometimes adolescents feel vulnerable and feels alone.
As a result
,
children
 spend significant
time
 on social media
such
 as Facebook and Instagram, and
also
 make friends online, whom they did not meet in the real life.
For instance
, one of the surveys in India reveals that
,
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 there are 70% of teenagers spend tremendous
time
 on the internet and 50% crime rate increased after introducing
social
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platform
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,
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 because they do not know
a
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nature of their online friends. On the other side, there is ample
of
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imperative measures to treat their criminal offence.
Firstly
,
parents
 should spend more
time
 with their
children
 to check
academic
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 progress and their friend list. Another, if
children
 make a mistake that
time
parents
 might be talking with them in a polite way to do not repeat that mistake
Moreover
, bonding plays
major
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 role if
parents
 have friendly bonding with their child
then
 Juvenil share all the things with their
parents
 without hesitation,
Parents
 should
also
 ask their teachers about behaviour in schools and their friends, To conclude,
although
 criminality rose nowadays in adolescents due to the internet and social media,
but
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parents
 could decline
this
 before it occurs by spending quality
time
 with their
children
 and making
a stronger bonds
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stronger bonds
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 with them.
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