Nowadays, many people have to work longer time, and they feel more stressful than before. What are the reasons? what can employers do to make their life easier?

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Stress

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is a big problem in today's

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high workload with unrealistic deadlines, makes people feel

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there and she was having less staff to work with at that time she was no able to handle things alone because being a

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the duties are double than the employer in that situation they can get pressurized or get stressed which is not good for mental and physical health. There may be

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of interpersonal support or poor working

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can be caused due to job security and less pay or might be having

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with your

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uncomfortable or

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with other workers as well.

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but not least, poor working

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. Employers can take lots of

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their job is giving them workload they

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manager or whoever is the supervisor to give them less

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job like what problem they are facing with and should

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review performance to know what skills they have and

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skills to give only that work to reduce

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the employer

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consider how

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hours they need to work and if any

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health. To sum up,

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

comfortable lifestyle
make ends meet
culture of 'presenteeism'
job insecurity
technological advancements
constant connectivity
globalization
irregular work hours
flexible working schedules
work-life balance
employee training and development
productivity
efficiency
healthier work environment
mental health resources

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