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Some people think it is better for children to grow up in the city, while others think that life in the countryside is most suitable. what are the advantages and disadvantages of both places?

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Nowadays,parents have started to give Prime importance to the way they are raising their
children
 in order to give them a better tomorrow.
However
, society has different opinions on where a
child
 should be raised. Few people believe that kids who brought up in cities will have
improved
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 quality of
life
 whereas others opine that
life
 will be much better in
countryside
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the countryside
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.
This
 essay intends to discuss the positives and negatives of both sides. Even in
this
 21st century-the era of modern technologies, people want to raise their
children
 in the village as they have some reasonable grounds. As a
child
 who is born and brought up in a
village
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 I am clearly aware of the advantages and disadvantages.
Firstly
, the countryside is blessed with eye-catching greenery  compared to the concrete jungles in the City.
In
addition
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 people in
rural
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the rural
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region
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 are least bothered about pollution and traffic blocks which contribute to the healthy development of
children
 as they are free from deadly diseases due to pollutants and ear-aching noises from the vehicles.
Furthermore
,youngsters who are being raised in
countryside
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the countryside
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 will tend to have
a great knowledge
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on
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of
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 tradition and culture and will
also
 be a master when it comes to maintaining the warmth of relationship. While considering the
life
 in cities it
also
 has many positive aspects
such
 as easy access to any place nearby with the help of widespread  transport facilities and has more to offer when it comes to advanced health-care facilities.
For
example
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 even if the
child
 is caught by any deadly disease the sophisticated health care system in
thr
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the
 towns has every treatment to offer in order to save the
child
's
life
. At the same
time
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 towns are considered the education hub and it helps in the better education of the
children
 who lives
their
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there
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 with higher career opportunities. As every story has two sides, both these places have
its
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their
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 own negatives too.
In
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one
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 hand village
life
 lacks advancement in the field of technology, health and education.
On the other hand
city
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life
 has to offer more pollution diseases and decreased sense of belonging To sum
up
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 even though both the places have pros and cons the pros outweigh the cons and it is the onus of the parents to help their kids to be a better human
being
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beings
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 despite where he or she has brought up
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