Nowadays, there are more opportunities for women than there were in the past. Some people think this situation has cause more problems than it has solved. What are your opinions on this?

Female
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nowadays are given more chances to chase their own careers and passion in
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life than those who live in the
last
decades.While
this
idea is supported by not only government and
citizen
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,a part of people still have the option that there are more
up-coming
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problems
instead
of the solutions It is worth to say that the female is likely to taking advantage in some field more than male.The
propotion
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proportion
of
women
are just be
borned
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born
bored
to do housework and taking care of kids is long gone.Ladies
are now be
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more patient,intelligent and their speech is as important as the man.In the government,in the case of
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State-a countries is known as
a
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racism in the ways of treating
women
which welcomed the
first
female vice president-
mis
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is
Kamala.In
such
developing
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and strong country,a
women
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stands up as an example of the idea
women
is supporting the decision of supporting genders equally.
Moreover
,
women
have many
preciated
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characteristic
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that the man hardly have
such
as the carefulness and risk of emotion.Those personalities give the female a huge advance in facing up
tremendous
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problem
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from any
fields
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.
However
,in my opinion,
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women
should not be given too
much
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responsibilities as
man
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which can cause more disasters not only for the countries.I agree that
women
are becoming wilder and more
powerfull
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powerful
day by day.
In contrast
,a small number of them can have the strength to put up with all the pressure during their works.
Additionally
,putting too
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emotions
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in the works can be their weakness.The emotional actions can lead them to
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terrible decisions especially the
women
who in charge of important position In conclusion,my point of view is the one side option.I believe that
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equallication
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equalisation
qualification
equalization
is important but the
women
should be considered carefully in giving their any chances.
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  • gender equality
  • social justice
  • economic development
  • innovation
  • traditional family roles
  • shared responsibilities
  • diverse perspectives
  • creativity
  • decision-making
  • educational opportunities
  • work-life balance
  • traditionalists
  • societal friction
  • gender roles
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