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Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves?

#nations #wealth #food #education #responsibility #governments #citizens
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It is widely noted that the governments of the poorer
nations
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 have the responsibility to look after their citizens but they do not always have the ability to do so.
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 is one of the main reasons why wealthy
nations
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 not only should but have to be required to share their wealth among the poorer
countries
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 by providing things
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 as food and
education
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. As a common man, we are obligated to help our kind with whatever we can and with the best of our abilities.
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, It is every person's right to have an
education
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 and we should not let
people
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 die from starvation.
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, It is inhumane to leave
people
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 living in
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 poor situations, which are occurred due to the negligence of Governments. For
such
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people
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 to have enough food and sufficient
education
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, more aid is needed from wealthy
nations
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.
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, lesser developed African
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such
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 as Kenya have thousands of
people
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 starving and many
people
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 do not have an
education
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.
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, some
people
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 think that every government should look for its own
people
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 and should not rely on wealthier
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.
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, it may be due to a fear that, if wealthier
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 help poorer
countries
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 they will get used to being helped and won't develop themselves, but
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 wealthier
nations
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 could help the poor governments with ideas on how to improve their
people
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's quality of life.
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, it is a common belief that the rich get richer and the poor get poorer. In conclusion, both wealthy and poor community should do their best for their society. Let's hope that in the future there will be more help from the wealthy regions, so all
people
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 live normally with enough food to eat, good health and sufficient schooling.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interconnected
  • global stability
  • economic self-sufficiency
  • sustainable development
  • capacity-building
  • foreign aid
  • mutual benefits
  • trade relations
  • long-term outcomes
  • dependency
  • moral obligation
  • alleviate poverty
  • humanitarian assistance
  • resource allocation
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