Some people think that sports play an important role in society. Others think they are nothing more than a leisure activity. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is undeniable that
sports
have significant roles on people
within a community. Some people
believe that such
a role is essential for people
, other people
believe that it is a matter of relaxation. It seems to me that sports
would lead to enhance
healthier generations for a certain culture.
Change the verb form
enhancing
To begin
with, some people
would argue that sports
are a form of entertainment and should be done in their free time. They would probably think that stress and pressure at work would disallow them to have a
plenty of time to do Remove the article
apply
such
kind
of Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
sports
. For instance
, the vast majority of people
in gulf countries suffer from obesity disease perhaps due to their laziness and having insufficient information about how beneficial doing sports
on daily basis is. It has been shown by many observers that many people
in certain countries suffer from illnesses due to lack
of physical activities in their lives, and they believe that having a daily walk for thirty minutes would surely boost their immune systems.
Correct article usage
a lack
However
, having sports
in
Change preposition
on
schedule
on Add an article
the schedule
a schedule
people
’s daily plans would no doubt develop their physical and mental abilities. They believe that sports
would generally have prime effects on their bodies, and would certainly lessen rates of injuries drastically especially for the elderly. For instance
, people
of many developed countries doing sports
as a habit, they believe that swimming or walking on daily
basis would Add an article
a daily
be resulted
in better health and Change to the active voice
result
have resulted
therefore
better outcomes in all aspects. A further
benefit on
society is that the number of Change preposition
to
people
who visit hospitals due to a heart attack or diabetes or other kinds of illnesses would decline significantly and thus
governments would have the ability to save much more money in its
annual budget.
In conclusion, we have talked about how a society might be benefited in terms of Correct pronoun usage
their
sports
and this
can be clearly shown in their citizens physic and in its
governmental budgets. I personally think that Correct pronoun usage
their
sports
should not only be done in free time,
but should be scheduled in their daily routines.Remove the comma
apply
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