it has been said that the world is becoming a global village in which there are no boundaries to trade and communication. Do the benefits of globalization outweigh the drawbacks?

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Due to globalisation,
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world
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to be
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world society.
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to reduce the barrier of commerce and language between the nation.
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tend has more positive aspect rather negative . There are numerous benefits of becoming
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world into
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village.Its help to promote the economy of developing countries.
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contries
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countries
,sell and buy their raw products directly in international grain markets and gets hefty profits.
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,Indian
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,now start selling raw cotton in Asian Markets and
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large profits .
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to promote export and import between the nations and businesses, which could
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the nation to run in
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of success.
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, communication advancement eliminates
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language barrier,now
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freely express their feelings and thought in other
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.
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,thousands of
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every year from developing countries
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to Canada ,in order to live and work.
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to increase their productivity. One major drawback of
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trend is,entrepreneurs of wealthy nations set up their factories and
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business
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in developing countries and start using their natural resources which causes
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of extinction.
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, carbon
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from the factories
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environment
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worse ,which would increase
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global warming . To conclude,modernisation bringing
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people
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close to each other and helps to promote trade markets and job opportunities by eliminating communication
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nevertheless
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it has some negative aspects which couldn't be neglected.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • global village
  • boundaries
  • trade
  • communication
  • benefits
  • drawbacks
  • economic
  • improved
  • connectivity
  • cultural exchange
  • diversity
  • access
  • markets
  • technology
  • competition
  • innovation
  • negative impacts
  • income inequality
  • cultural identity
  • environmental degradation
  • exploitation
  • workers
  • developing countries
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