Criminality is growing among children and teenagers. Why is it growing and how should These criminals be treated?

Children
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minds are like sponges,
thus
they can easily catch up with everything around them. Currently,
crime
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the crime
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ration
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ratio
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escalate
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has escalated
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among
child
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children
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and
undergraduate
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undergraduates
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. There are several reasons for
such
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which
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explaining
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in the ensuing paragraph with some preventive action against the juvenile offenders. Discussing the reason for
teenager
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criminality, the foremost cause is lack of primary
education
. If an individual cannot get educated
then
they
do
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not aware
about
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law and order against
crime
and try to misdeed.
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, as per the
last
survey through
Indian
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the Indian
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government
, 70%
juvenile
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of juvenile
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offender is not educated and not aware of laws.
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, teenagers are easy convenience to
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misdeed
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misdeeds
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by
giving temptation
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about
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the
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money
. Nowadays
juvenile
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juveniles
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does
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commit
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crime
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crimes
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because
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to earn easy
money
through a shortcut like
a
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apply
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chain
snatcher
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snatchers
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and pocket
snatcher
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.
In addition
,
discussing
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it discusses
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preventive measures to overcome juvenile
crime
.
Government
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The government
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should start free
education
for
child
criminal
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criminals
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thus
they get knowledge and develop themself. If teens are educated
then
they don’t need to take shortcuts to earn
money
which leads to
reduce
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child
criminal rates.
Furthermore
,
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government
should give special attention to the
child
, who
is
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left by
parents
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their parents
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;
authority
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should give military training and give proper
guild-lines
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guidelines
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about career development.
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, the Indian
government
start
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a mission to educate criminals on prison, namely “Siksha on Jail”.
To conclude
, In
this
developing world , juveniles more intend towards
crime
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crimes
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because of the lack of
education
and
temptation
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the temptation
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of
money
, which can be mitigated
through provide
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by providing
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education
to
child
criminal
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criminals
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in juvenile jail and
give
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giving
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guidelines for the betterment of their
carrier
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careers
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.
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