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Learning English language in an English speaking country is easy, but not the only methodology. Do you agree or disagree?

#english #language #country #methodology
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, it needs to be paid or not. To find the answer
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this
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hand and
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,
people
 think that the
information
 needs to be shared. The one reason is that it will help the
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community community
 in managing their business, or, to be more familiar about scientific studies and will help the students to be informed about the academic
information
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 it will create the conditions for
people
 to be prepared for different situations and to be
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able able
 to manage better their life.
For example
, if I will know about some
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relevant relevant
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information
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another
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 hand, some
people
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 that important things are valuable, and it is no reason to share them
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 free. NowedaysNowadays, everything
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 money, so, the
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 to be paid
.
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For instance
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legal advice is
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information
, because ba Lawyer
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taught
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 getting the legal
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proficiency proficiency
, and it is not fear to share the
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 their curiosity, they need to invest in it. In conclusion, I believe that
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 informed make you stronger, but nothing needs to be expected without charge,
in other words
,
information
 is precious. In the end, I still
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people
 to share the basic
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information information
 between them to improve the better life and professionals conditions.
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