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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation , such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money.Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

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Everyone needs to cope with dislikable situations in their daily life. What's the best way to deal with unsatisfactory events in life? Some believe that accepting reality as soon as possible will help to relieve the heavy mood. Since what happened have already happened, there is nothing you can do to reverse time.
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, the sooner you could acknowledge the truth, the quicker you would be able to carry on. People who hold that point of view is speaking as pessimists. If you cannot change the world, change yourself. Others,
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, argue that adapting your own attitude rather than the real situation might help with temporary satisfaction, yet the inconvenience is still there. From a long term perspective, addressing the exact thing that makes you unhappy would be the wiser choice. In my opinion, there are things that we can make a difference and things that we cannot. For those inevitable tragedies,
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 as the loss of beloved ones, there is no way to make it better.
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, in most cases, putting in effort almost always makes things better. Imagine that you are doing a 996 job, which means that you have to work from 9 am to 9 pm six days per week, doing it for a long time might cause fatal damage to your health. What would you do? Persuade yourself to bear with it, or land a job in a more humane company? There is always a choice for you to make a change unless there is none!
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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