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The plans below show the site of mining town in the past and after redevelopment in the present day.

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The given maps elucidate changes in the old and present mining place. At a cursory glance, it can be easily seen that
currently
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 the place has more entertainment facilities than previous. Regarding the old map, on the northern part, where an active mining spot can be seen;
however
,
this
 site is not functioning now, so visitors can have access there. Two rubbish points which were located in the west were demolished to build the driving truck track and picnic area respectively. Previously, to the east end of the mining area was an office and workers dress changing point. These two buildings were removed a new museum is constructed there.
Similarly
, the Medical room was in the centre of the town was replaced by a café. Apart from
this
, Lowry park was knocked down to build a footpath to the newly constructed children playground locating
next
 to the picnic area. The only thing which is remained unchanged is the parking lot that can be located in the lower left-hand corner of the map.
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