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Students are becoming more and more reliant on the Internet. While the Internet is convenient, it has many negative effects and its use for educational purposes should be restricted. How far do you agree with this statement?

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It is widely argued that the
internet
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has a massive impact on
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education
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 process. It is considered by some people that the
internet
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 is totally good for
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, why is there are others who believe that you said you'll damage educational achievement.
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, there are a lot of disadvantages of the
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 in learning
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, the
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 of the
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 is increasing every day. I oppose
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 is the most advanced and Innovative thing
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 has a huge effect
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 learning improvement.
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 a way of searching about information and related time and effort. In the past, we used to spend much time between books and references to be able to do our homework. But today, we
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 to press one button in C ward off
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 to discover the world and reach
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what we want in less than 5 minutes. What example, we can do our essay and report for University through the website without exhaustion or challenges. Another point worth noting is that
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internet
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using
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 may be useful for
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 from middle or low-income families.
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,
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 using of technology in
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 does not need special methods of Transport or some type of clauses When comparing it with traditional
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.
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 around the world to reaching information successfully and give them a chance to learn regardless of their economical level or social status.
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, the
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 may need computer training courses before they started
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 the
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 in
education
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.
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, the
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' commitment rate is decreasing
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 of depending on the
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. They are neglect attending class because they will surf
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the
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 about class subjects lately. in conclusion, it is certainly true that the
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 may
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 a little negatives effect
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learning
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 process and the
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 or make it prohibited.
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  • critical thinking
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  • global cultures
  • enriching
  • unrestricted
  • information overload
  • discerning
  • credible sources
  • incorporation
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  • innovative
  • pedagogy
  • digital age
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