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Students are becoming more and more reliant on the Internet. While the Internet is convenient, it has many negative effects and its use for educational purposes should be restricted. How far do you agree with this statement?

#students #internet #effects #purposes
It is widely argued that the
internet
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has a massive impact on
education
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 process. It is considered by some people that the
internet
 is totally good for
Education
, why is there are others who believe that you said you'll damage educational achievement.
Although
, there are a lot of disadvantages of the
internet
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 in learning
method
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, the
using
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 of the
internet
 is increasing every day. I oppose
this
 view and my reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs. It is universally accepted that the
internet
 is the most advanced and Innovative thing
this
 time. On one hand, the
internet
 has a huge effect
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 learning improvement.
Firstly
 it
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 a way of searching about information and related time and effort. In the past, we used to spend much time between books and references to be able to do our homework. But today, we
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 to press one button in C ward off
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 to discover the world and reach
to
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what we want in less than 5 minutes. What example, we can do our essay and report for University through the website without exhaustion or challenges. Another point worth noting is that
the
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internet
using
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 may be useful for
students
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 from middle or low-income families.
For instance
,
they
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 using of technology in
education
 does not need special methods of Transport or some type of clauses When comparing it with traditional
education
.
This
 advanced technology is helping many
students
 around the world to reaching information successfully and give them a chance to learn regardless of their economical level or social status.
On the other hand
, the
students
 may need computer training courses before they started
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 the
internet
 in
education
.
Furthermore
, the
students
' commitment rate is decreasing
as a result
 of depending on the
internet
. They are neglect attending class because they will surf
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the
internet
 about class subjects lately. in conclusion, it is certainly true that the
internet
 may
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 a little negatives effect
in
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learning
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 process and the
students
, but
this
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 it is
usage
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 or make it prohibited.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • independent learning
  • critical thinking
  • excessive reliance
  • hinder
  • crucial
  • problem-solving
  • overly dependent
  • diversity
  • perspectives
  • global cultures
  • enriching
  • unrestricted
  • information overload
  • discerning
  • credible sources
  • incorporation
  • engagement
  • adaptivity
  • personalized learning
  • innovative
  • pedagogy
  • digital age
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