IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 4

Teachers used to convey information, but now students have access to a wide resources of information, there is no role for teachers to play in modern education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#teachers #information #students #access #resources #role #education
It is suggested that
teachers
 are no longer required in the
Correct your spelling
field
show examples
filed
Correct your spelling
field
show examples
 of education since there are various routes for
students
 to inquire
the
Change preposition
about the
show examples
information
 they need. I completely disagree that the role of a teacher is any less important these days. It is true that with the development of the Internet,
information
 and relevant
knowledges
Change the wording
knowledge
pieces of knowledge
bits of knowledge
show examples
 are more approachable than before.
However
, not everything we find on the Internet is completely accurate. The ability
of viewing
Replace the preposition
to view
show examples
 the
information
 gathered in a critical and logical way is often taught by
teachers
. If
teachers
 were taken out of the path of learning,
students
 would not have the capability to determine whether
thay
Correct your spelling
they
 have found the correct
information
.
Moreover
, aside from delivering
knowledges
Change the wording
knowledge
pieces of knowledge
bits of knowledge
show examples
 and
information
,
teachers
 educate
students
 in various ways,
Firstly
, having
teachers
 in classes provides
students
 with the opportunity of human interaction, which is vital for human society.
Secondly
,
teachers
 stimulate
students
' interests in learning.
For example
, I used to hate English because it was too complicated for me to understand, but I fell in love with it because of my middle school English teacher who encouraged me and showed me the charm of the language.
Finally
, every student is unique,
teachers
 are able to notice these characteristics and offer help to different
students
accordingly
. In conclusion,
teachers
 are always the key to the success of
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
education no matter how abundant the resources of
information
 are.
Submitted by 576579710 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: