In many countries today people are choosing to have fewer children. Why is this the cause? What are the effects of this trend on the society?
Recently around the globe, most parents are making a choice of having a small family size
as a result
of various factors such
as a better quality of life. This
essay would
Wrong verb form
will
further
expatiate on the causes and the effects this
decision has on the
society.
The choice of having fewer babies Correct article usage
apply
enable
parents to financially cater for their young properly, as Correct subject-verb agreement
enables
such
, translates to having an heir who is physically sound. For example
, my husband and I decided to birth 3
Kids, having monitored our daily expenditure over time, we concluded it was the best decision at the time. Change preposition
to 3
Furthermore
, a study done on a few fathers in South
Carolina hospital revealed, Correct article usage
a South
the
fewer children parents have the better as they have been noticed to spend more quality time training the first and second child morally and psychologically. Other infants who were given birth to are usually left at the mercy of their senior siblings.
Ultimately, Correct word choice
that the
this
trend has a positive effect on society.Firstly
, the company is made up of well-trained adolescents who grow up into youth and contributes
their best at their place of work, paying their taxes. Correct subject-verb agreement
contribute
This
improves the revenue generated by the government. Secondly
, the neighbourhood is a safe place for all, as there are no armed robbers, rapists, cultists or gunmen, thus
social security is ensured. For instance
, my Christian public is socially secured
as no robbery, rape, Replace the word
secure
occultism
has ever been recorded. Correct word choice
or occultism
Thirdly
, they offer new ideas and skill
which Fix the agreement mistake
skills
improves
Correct subject-verb agreement
improve
industrialisation
of the vicinity, they can Correct article usage
the industrialisation
also
become entrepreneurs as such
, the society is not burdened with jobless youth.
In conclusion, the recent trend of having a smaller family size is a choice that is
beneficial to both the immediate family and community at large as it decreases the financial burden on the family and improved
communal life, Wrong verb form
improves
therefore
should be promoted.Submitted by Dammy on
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grammar
Your essay reads well overall, but there are a few areas to improve. Firstly, ensure to use consistent plural or singular forms. For example, 'birth 3 Kids' should be 'birth 3 kids.'
lexical
Work on expanding your vocabulary to avoid repetition and use more varied language. Instead of repeatedly saying 'few children,' try synonyms like 'smaller family size' or 'limited offspring.'
content
Your introduction clearly states the topic and your points which gives a comprehensive preview of your essay.
supporting points
The essay provides well-rounded examples and studies to support your points, which strengthens the reasoning.
Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic
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You essay structure should look something like this:
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – Problems
- Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- One of the first problems of the...
- Another problem that needs to be considered...
- A possible solution to this problem would be...
- One immediate practical solution is to...