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In many countries, old or traditional languages are dying out or being forgotten, especially by younger people. Is this an acceptable development which occurs inevitably, or is it something which we should try to prevent?

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In some countries, ancient or native
languages
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 are disappearing
due to
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 modernism.
However
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 it happens like
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phenomena
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, there are always ways to prevent it. I will consider both sides here. On the one hand, critics say that
this
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 occurs inevitably during developing years in countries. Globalization affects all over the world and one
language
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 tends to be the main
language
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 for people. Citizens do not have the intention to learn their own traditional
language
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especially
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 for younger people. Another main reason for old
languages
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 to vanish is no consumption in daily life.
Language
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 shifts are important to save traditional
languages
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 in the modern world. If there is no usage of the
language
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, it
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 die out doubtlessly. The other side of
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 debate is that government policy needs to be implemented in public to prevent mother-tongue from dying. In many
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, campaign works have been introducing and teaching their traditional
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 to other nationalities to prevent it from vanishing.
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, old
languages
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 should be taught in schools from early ages to young ages and teachers need to convince them how important it is to save their ancient
languages
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. For example, in Mongolia people are starting to use their own
mongolian
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 script in work or formally to save,
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also
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for introducing
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 others. One of the greatest implementations was a requirement for those who want to join a government organization, have to know their own
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.
To conclude
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, it appears that both government and non-governmental organizations should expand their campaign efforts to introduce traditional
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 young ages who
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information.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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