In some countries in Europe, some children from the age of 11 or 13 go to schools to learn more practical skills that will help them get a job. Other children stay in schools which provide a more general academic education. What should schools do to prepare students for the world of work?

Many European countries are mainly focused on practical experience and prepare
children
at the age of 11 to 13 for
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world's job market. Whereas, opponents believe that
children
should complete their education before starting working actually. It is true that
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the real working environment is very challenging and demands lots of skills and practical knowledge, even at the
first
job. Due to
this
reason many qualifications had made it compulsory to complete some years of training or artisanship to be fully qualified.
This
is majorly to avoid unemployment in future, due to lack of experience.
Also
, it is
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for the students to start working at the initial stage
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because they will be having theoretical knowledge fresh in their mind and would be able to implement
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efficiently.
On the other hand
, it should
also
not neglect that
children
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early stage, might be at various risks. There is
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that students, who start earning money, will get
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too of it and might drop their
further
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preliminary stage.
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risk that these
children
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from their new jobs.
Also
, some
children
may consider
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pressure and might drop studies or work. To conclude, it is beneficial to encounter pupils
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real world's work environment and let them
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know, how they should face
this
. But
this
should not be imposed on them to work compulsorily to achieve their educational certificates; there should be flexibility in these things.
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  • curriculum
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving
  • communication skills
  • career guidance
  • counseling
  • internships
  • apprenticeships
  • local industries
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  • technological skills
  • entrepreneurship
  • innovation
  • financial literacy
  • budgeting
  • teamwork
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