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Some people think that secondary school children should study international news as one of the school subjects. Other people think that international news as one of the school subjects. What do you think? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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With the abroad trending, few people feel that high
school
children
 have to study global
news
 as one of the
acadamic
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academic
 subjects.
On the other
hand
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 few people think world
news
 to be one among the
school
 subject.In my
stand point
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standpoint
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, providing secondary
school
children
 would be more helpful as it would expose them to
outside
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the outside
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 world eventually
buidling
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building
 up more confidence in them. Education is going way forward with the increasing competition.The world is condensing into a global village with the advancement and easy access to the internet.To cope up with the competition, have access to global
news
 is inevitable and need of the hour.
However
, the accessibility should be based on the understanding of the
children
 and not
to
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apply
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overburden them.Provide
the
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apply
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exposure to high
school
 students would be more beneficial. If in case global
news
 is inculcated in the study subject, it would help the students but limited to byhearting it without much understanding.My Nephew sent his son to
international
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an international
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 high
school
 and now he is in a
suitation
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situation
 to talk about cultures of different countries.
On the other hand
, my
susters
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sisters
sister's
 child who joined
international
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an international
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school
 who display globals
news
 and
children
 play or sleep when the subject comes in. To recapitulate, the decision to include international
news
 should be based on the capacity to understand and its use in the near future.It has to become
boon
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a boon
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 and not
bane
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a bane
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 to students.
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