In many countries, the amount of crimes is increasing. What do you think the main cause of the crime? How can we deal with those causes?

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Globally,

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Crime

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rate has been increasing day by day. They are various reasons for

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crimes

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. Some of the reasons are overexposure to

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, lack of

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, scarcity of money and psychological problems. In

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essay, I will discuss both causes and solutions.

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of all,

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plays a major role in

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life mentally.

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, Countries around the world developing

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crime

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rate is

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increasing mostly

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women due to

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of sex

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women are suffering the most.

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which

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all over the world. In

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case, many of the uneducated men along with teenagers are involved. Not only

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overexposure to the internet

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leads to

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crimes

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. As technology is advancing, based on

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increasing. As technology can be used both positively and negatively but many

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teenagers are opting

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rapes as well hacking.

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rate is increasing because of

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of money due to unemployment, overpopulation. So, As

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is increasing, many

people

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not have their desired jobs. Thereby, poverty leads the

people

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wrong

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path

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such

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as robbery, smuggling of goods and drugs.

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people

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this weapons

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to kill innocent

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. There

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no strict rules to eradicate it. Currently, many

people

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are undergoing

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of stress, depression and getting emotional

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due to some personal problems which

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to assassinations in anger. Altogether, These factors have the solutions

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from early ages in schools, sex

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must be included. Along with

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, parents should observe their children while using

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and they need to explain the disadvantages as well as they need to check the mental state of their children and need to teach them how to overcome every problem in their life. Parents should spend some time with their children, so they can express feelings, emotions and helps to increase bonding between them. While

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government

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should provide jobs as well as they need to take measures to control

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, they need to implement strict laws, so that, no one dares to do

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type

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crimes

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again.

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along with

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society can solve the rates of

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happening in our daily life.

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In many countries, the amount of crimes is increasing. What do you think the main cause of the crime? How can we deal with those causes?

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in some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people why this might be the case? do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Some people said that it is kind of waste if people plan for the future and it is more important to focus on the present. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Waste disposal presents increasing problems, especially in urban areas. What do you think are the causes? Give some suggestions to the government and individuals on how to reduce the amount of rubbish.

Some people believe that children of all ages should have extra responsibilities (for example, helping at home or at work). Others believe that, outside of school, children should be free to enjoy their lives. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.